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Post by CromTheConqueror on Mon Jul 26, 2010 9:22 pm

I adore the last line.

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Post by Admin on Mon Jul 26, 2010 9:30 pm

I like, but you still seriously need to work on writing MN. This needs buckets of polish even though the story itself is very good.
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Post by MidgetNinja on Mon Jul 26, 2010 9:35 pm

Get off my back I'm a little...insane with hunger right now...

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Post by CromTheConqueror on Mon Jul 26, 2010 9:46 pm

I guess now would be a bad time to mention I'm eating a stuff crust pizza with mountain dew...

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Post by MidgetNinja on Mon Jul 26, 2010 10:14 pm

Thanks for you the well thought out responses guys...

No really...I learned a lot...

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Post by CromTheConqueror on Mon Jul 26, 2010 10:54 pm

Few thoughts.

1. Can this apply for all mountain ranges? Because I want monsters in the black mountains too. It seems to go with the cave theme.

2. Mountains probably shouldn't be totally devoid of life. Devoid of civilization sure but there should be some natural wildlife to help the corruption process along.

3. Great idea overall.

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Post by MidgetNinja on Tue Jul 27, 2010 12:34 am

Ok in that order

1. Yes they can, although a few things to consider, number one being that mosnters DON'T just dwell in caves, they just dwell in the deepest, darkest, reaches of the wilds. Most often anyway. Another thing worth mention that monster have been known to be as bid as moderate sized hills in some cases...and some of them could probably wipe out a small city unaided...

2. Mountains are by no means devoid of life, I was just saying that large PORTIONS of the SPINE are still...just...empty...

And finally...

3. Thank you..

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Post by MidgetNinja on Tue Jul 27, 2010 4:55 pm

Incidentally I edited the language a bit chaos...NOW tell me what you think...

Nazi...

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Post by Admin on Tue Jul 27, 2010 5:07 pm

It's better.

Also, I was thinking that the origins of the Progenitor and/or other monsters could also be linked to whatever hiding daemons are left about, or daemons that were able to escape.

Could be both the Death Gods and the daemons...
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Post by MidgetNinja on Thu Aug 05, 2010 12:00 am

Not sure about Death Gods and daemons working together...I imagine there is still plenty of animosity there.

I have an idea on who to blame...but if you have any suggestions of you own I'm more then open to them.

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Post by Admin on Thu Aug 05, 2010 12:55 am

They don't have to be working together necessarily, they only have to have their both of their hands in it. Only a thought though.
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Post by MidgetNinja on Thu Aug 05, 2010 3:14 am

I suppose...I'll sort it all out like in a proper origins piece later...

Further notice, I've re-edited the topic, I do believe I've properly gotten all the errors at this point...

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Post by Admin on Thu Aug 05, 2010 1:27 pm

"long sense dormant"
long since dormant

Also, really want to know how the Death God got free and what happened there... crazy stuff.

"born beneath the Spirit's radar"
Probably Spirits' instead, unless you mean a specific one.

"the damage from spared beyond"
'the damage spreading beyond' I think?

"The spirits fight their battles"
Spirits, so it's capital?

"the only thing the truly have left"
the only thing they truly have left


After that I'll put it into... damn. Where should this go? It could kinda fit anywhere, but I guess into Lore and History? Maybe Magic and the Divine, since it's more -Divine-?
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Post by CromTheConqueror on Thu Aug 05, 2010 1:33 pm

I would think it could fit into any of our current categories. I'd probably choose history because it's no specific magical mechanics and more historical lore then anything else.

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Post by MidgetNinja on Thu Aug 05, 2010 4:09 pm

Admin wrote:
Also, really want to know how the Death God got free and what happened there... crazy stuff.

That...I will extrapolate on with something else I'm working on...

Also final revision have been made I believe.

History and Lore would be best.

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